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Ryan says: Here's the challenge I face in my new job.

Autumn says: ?

Ryan says: I'm editing content about prostate cancer, and I'm confonted with a description of a Digital Rectal Exam, which states:

Autumn says: This outta be good.

Ryan says: "This is a basic and easy screening test for prostate cancer and other prostate diseases, involving a doctor gently inserting a gloved, lubricated finger into the rectum."

Autumn says: And?

Autumn says: Lotsa guys get turned on by that; is that the problem?

Ryan says: Well, my challenge is to make that NOT SOUND horrible.

Autumn says: The words, "gently" and "lubricated" should help.

Ryan says: Better than "roughly" with "sandpaper," I suppose.

Autumn says: True.

Autumn says: Now, if you could just change the word "rectum" to something else.

Autumn says: I would also stay away from the word "cram".

Ryan says: LOL!

Autumn says: Or "joyfully."

Autumn says: Or "delightfully."

Ryan says: "This is a basic and easy screening test for prostate cancer and other prostate diseases, involving a doctor joyfully and carelessly cramming a gloved, bone dry finger into the rectum."

Autumn says: Again, I am under my desk laughing!

Ryan says: Your mention of the word "cram" made me stand up and walk to a nearby hallway to laugh, so we're even.

Posted by Ryan at July 16, 2008 01:38 PM | TrackBack